From: E. Shaun Russell (e_shaun@uniserve.com)
Date: Sun Jun 01 1997 - 12:20:31 MDT
Ard wrote:
> We loved your piece. We question, however two words.
>
>> No more shall we adhere to laws or rules with which we don't comply,
>
> If we don't adhere, we also don't comply. Would not "agree" be a more
>precise word?
Not quite. Many people tend to go along with things even if they
don't agree with them. Why stick with something they don't agree with? It
is evocative of the age old saying: "You don't like it? Well live with it."
A saying which many governments silently adopt, and what I wanted to convey
with this line of my poem.
>> No more shall we idly accept order and let ourselves be led,
>
> In place of "order", how about "authority"?
Good point. From now on the line will read: "No more shall we
accept authority and let ourselves be led." Not only does it alleviate any
possible misunderstanding, but it also creates an internal rhyme.
Thanks for the comments...as you can see, they are useful.
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