From: Russell Blackford (rblackford@hotmail.com)
Date: Sun Jul 15 2001 - 02:55:11 MDT
Reason said
>1) cut to the chase sooner. Condense those first two paragraphs into one
>sentence ["things are a-changin'"] and start directly with "we have to be
>prepared to live longer."
Not sure I agree with this. If it was an academic essay, perhaps so - every
word has to count. But I think it is okay to lead in gently with a speech to
a non-specialised audience like this, or even in a newspaper feature article
(a hard news story requires a different technique again).
>2) remove references to SciFi works; no matter how great they are, the
>majority of the populance looks down their nose at SciFi.
Hey, Reason: "Never say 'SciFi'!" :-) The accepted abbreviation among
those who care about the genre is "SF" or "sf".
That said, Reason is absolutely right. Sadly, the reference to _Dune_ has to
go.
>3) people like a challenge -- consider that everyone around 25-40 today
>stands on the greatest cusp in history.
<Sigh.> Us over 40s are in trouble again.
Cheers
Russell
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